This week we have used another picture as motivation for our writing. We had a story starter and then we had to carry on the story.
What I like about my writing is i wrote lots.
I need to improve on everything.
Here is my writing about Animal Town.
VRRRRMMMM!!!! I was going on an adventure in an old town until my map flew away. So I drove straight until I reached a sign, it said - Welcome to Animal Town. “What?” I drove under a big tree then I knew why it was called animal town. There was a gorilla sheriff and a sloth in a taxi and lots and lots of animals everywhere. I wanted to stay for a couple of weeks
I wasn’t scared they were really nice, until one day I woke up and heard a loud scream coming from town. I ran outside and looked at a car. It looked really familiar. “Oh no! It's the big bad wolf.” I ran to the telephone and rang 111. “111 what’s your emergency?” “The big bad wolf is back he's in the bank robbing it,”I shouted. “I’ll be there in a minute!” Then he arrested the big bad wolf.
After that I went to have breakfast, I had a cereal called Snackimals.Then it was time to go to the animal park. So I got in my car and went to the animal park to play with some animals. When I got there I saw a little dog laying on the floor. So I walked over to the dog to see what happened. When I got there I saw a bite mark. So I picked it up and took him to the vet. Then a week later he was out playing again.
After all that I left animal town and went back to New Zealand. One day I wish to go back there again.
This week we have used another picture as motivation for our writing. We had a story starter and then we had to carry on the story.
What I like about my writing is nothing.
I need to improve on using more good words.
Here is my writing about Animal Town.